TIME IN EGYPT


TIME IN EGYPT


In the past it was Egypt and there lived a king named Zordone. He is cruel. His wife passed away and had already gave birth to a girl. The girl was very pretty, responsible, kind, caring, fixes the bad and helps the good. She can’t fix her dad though. They live in an Egypt dessert. From 12:00 – 08:59 it got cooler and cooler. They lived in the biggest pyramid in Egypt. It was very sandy, and you get a magical feeling. There’s a cave and potions inside. When you say something it echoes and when you step on a rock a pumpkin traps you. There is also a family in the normal time. There is a mom that is very pretty. She is protective and scared. She cries so hard when one of her children gets hurt. She is 47. The dad is 49 and very strong. He can carry the whole family at the same time. But he’s a scardy cat. They have two children. The first one is a girl and the second one is a boy. Her name is Akshaya. She goes to university and is 17. She is pretty like her mom, kind, caring, all ways exiting, and jumpy. The boy’s name is Nikesh. He is 15 and goes to high school. He is in grade 11. He thinks he’s funny and that’s what everyone says. When someone catches him, he tickles them. The kids came for summer vacation. It had only been 5 days since they came, and they already had asked a scientist and a mechanic to help them make a time machine.
 
They put the safety cover on the button to return instead of on the go back in time button. They said, “we’ll fix it at home”. They forgot what they said. When they got home they tried to remember but the couldn’t. On Saturday Akshaya and Nikesh nearly forgot where they put the time machine, so they totally forgot that they put the cover in the wrong place. At 09:30 they wanted to press the return button for fun and accidentally, everyone in the house went to the Egypt. The family was only 2 meters away from Evil king Zordone’s house. The dad was so mad and was shouting while mom was looking for a stick to hit the kids. She hit them on their hands and she also starting shouting. They said the kids have to be on a time out until the grown-ups figure out what this place is.  Then, they stumbled on Zordone’s daughter Alisha. She greeted them kindly, but the parents didn’t think that she was nice because she had a black, creepy dress.
 
 

Then, she brought them to her pyramid. Her dada thought that she had finally turned evil because he wanted a time machine to go to the future and turn all the humans into sand and be their king because he thought that he was the best and that he should have everything done the way he wants it to be done. He congratulated Alisha but she tells him for the millionth time that she isn’t evil, but the parents of Akshaya and Nikesh hear the part when Zordone congratulates Alisha and not the part where she explains the truth again.

Now that Alisha knows about her dad’s plan, she tries to warn Akshaya and Nikesh but their parents don’t let her, so she sneaks into their room and secretly tells them. Their parents somehow come into their part of the room and find Alisha. She tells them the truth, but they ask for proof, so she brings them to her dad’s lair and show that he is making a sketch to steal their time machine and turn them into sand. Then, all of the friends work together and make a plan in less than a day to sneak into Alisha’s dad’s lair.

 The next day, they put their plan into action. Nikesh quietly sneaks into the layer and dismantles the time machine and brings it back with his parents, and Akshaya and Alisha find the potion and make a reverse potion and mix them together to make them neutral so nothing will happen. If anything goes wrong, Nikesh will give a distraction. All goes well except when Nikesh accidentally steps on a rock and get trapped inside a pumpkin, so Alisha tells her dad that she is evil and she trapped him there on purpose. Akshaya and Nikesh’s parents think that Alisha is evil and that their predictions were right but Akshaya explains that she told Alisha to do that.
 

Akshaya carved the pumpkin and got Nikesh free, and they continue to dismantle the time machine and bring it back, but Akshaya’s job is more rushed because they estimated a little bit more than enough time for them to figure out the reverse potion. Since Alisha still does kind things, Zordone finds out that she is lying and grabs the potion from Akshaya and ties everyone up except for Alisha.

Near their time to get turned into sand, Akshaya asked why he wanted to turn everyone into sand, and Zordone said that he wanted to turn everyone into sand because no one ever listens to what he says, so if everyone is scared of him, they will follow what he says, but since Alisha built a time machine and went to the future, she saw what people were ion the future and since she was evil before, she told me that they didn’t obey me so I made a like potion and tried on animals. Alisha thought that they were innocent so she turned on me.

Then, Akshaya and Nikesh said that if he spoke softly, more people would listen, but if he spoke with ager and loudly, people wouldn’t listen. Akshaya and Nikesh’s parents said that Zordone has to give respect in order to earn it and many more sayings. But as more time went on, we started turning into sand! Zordone apologized for being rude and told us that he mixed the sand potion into our food and drinks so that we would turn into sand for sure. I told him that Alisha and I were making a reverse potion and that it finally mix it in with the mixture, but we already turned into sand, but they poured it on where they thought we were. And we turned back into humans, reassembled the time machine, and went home.

The end




Comments

Anonymous said…
Nice !!! Keep it up
Anonymous said…
Very interesting.., Time in Egypt.., she connected herself, Nikesh and you both parents. She has lot of imagination about things and places. Well, she is truly a gifted child. Kalyani Eesa
Anonymous said…
thank you all, for taking the time to read my stories and leave a motivational comment. I extremely appreciate it:)
Akshaya
Anonymous said…
" Nikesh quietly sneaks into the layer and dismantles the time machine and brings it back with his parents," wow kuddi

What a fantastic world you all were in, The fascinating thing is you bring all of us readers into to your wonderful world it's amazing , you are excellent in wording. which not every one can. well done.
Anonymous said…
" Nikesh quietly sneaks into the layer and dismantles the time machine and brings it back with his parents," wow kuddi

What a fantastic world you all were in, The fascinating thing is you bring all of us readers into to your wonderful world it's amazing , you are excellent in wording. which not every one can. well done....Muralie
Ashvini Paranan said…
Hi,My name is Ashvini Paranan and I am a secondary school student(age 14) from Singapore...I really like how you connected the past and present. I also like the fact that you clearly explained the 5Ws and 1H(Who, what, when, where, why and how). I also like how you had a good management of the amount of phrases used. I also like how u made a father and a daughter totally opposite from each other. I also liked the fiction part of the story. Overall, I think it is a really job well done! I would give you a 38/40! Please continue to write such amazing stories
akshaya said…
thank you for your constructive comments and time you took to read my stories and write these comments with specific parts of the story:)

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